Aust Winner 澳洲长风论坛

[白水]

The last quarter moon is like a reaphook
sickles the stars.
that were once my dream,
it scattered in the sky.

The poetry
that were once my spirit
but today, just for a piece of bread,
I have to quit.
I cannot hold the glitter,
it breaks in the water.

The moon
incised silent lake
who knows about that bluish pain?

[雪泥]

怎么读着有点别扭？意向运用倒很不错

[白水]

[雪泥]

主要是时态的运用有点混淆