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[海外逸士]

《訪一瞽叟歸作》
Written on Returning From a Visit to a Blind Man

郊歸獨過曹河涇﹐浩月多情伴我行。四野聲冥增杳曠﹐九天雲淨更空明。
瞽盲言語疑真假﹐通達命運可恃憑﹖何日春風能得意﹐吹吾萬里上神京。

Returning from a suburb of Zaohejing alone
The bright moon loves me so as to accompany me home
The fields around so quiet look eerily wide
The sky clear of clouds seems empty and brighter
I doubt it’s true or not what the blind man said
How can I depend on the foretelling of the good fate?
On which day can the complacent spring wind
Carry me over myriad miles to the divine capital?

[howard2005]

学习海外逸士老师新译。

Returning from a suburb of Zaohejing alone
The bright moon loves me so as to accompany me home

从这两行来看，The bright moon 是分词短语Returning from a suburb的逻辑主语，但是Returning的主语应该是我。

When I return from a suburb of Zaohejing alone
The bright moon loves me so as to accompany me home

Returning from a suburb of Zaohejing alone
I am accompanied home by the loving bright moon.

[howard2005]

拙译如下，敬请老师指点。

I return from the suburb of Zaohejing alone,
Accompanied home by the loving moon bright.
On fields silence deepens expanse unknown,
Across boundless skies no clouds are in sight.
I doubt the realness of the blind man's say,
How can I depend on the foretold fate fine?
On which day can the spring breeze be gay
To blow me over miles to the capital divine?

[海外逸士]

謝謝你的意見﹐及重譯。詩裡為了簡潔﹐不考慮邏輯主語問題。考試時才考慮。

[苑眉]

[巫逖]

这叫做考场内外有别。哈哈！

[海外逸士]

巫先生好幽默。哈哈。

不過﹐讀英文詩主要看感情表達和用詞確切﹐詩有它自己的一套“語法”﹐即習慣
表達法。

[巫逖]