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[非马]

读书

打开书
字带头
句跟随
一下子跑得精光

只剩下
一个畅销的书名
以及人人谈论的
作者的名字

果然好书


READING

upon opening the book
words lead the way
sentences follow
all disappear in a flash

Only the best-selling title
and the hot name
of the author
remain

What a great book

[中尉]

非马老师的诗诙谐幽默，道出了读书的境界与乐趣，
问好：）

[非马]

问中尉好！谢谢阅评。

[巫逖]

心和血的杰作！
美和力的艺术！
向非马艺术世界学习！
向非马老师致敬！

[非马]

巫逖先生过奖了！让我们彼此学习。

[海外逸士]

The first line too long. you can just write as:
"When opening the book,"
No need to put in subject "he". It can be "you" or "I".

"In a jiffy" better than "in a hurry".

In the second stanza, you can put in order as the original:

Only remain
The best-selling title
......
......

What a great book

[非马]

Thanks for the comments and suggestions.