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[苑眉]

清 晨

清晨，醒来，
在园中小立。

蓝色的牵牛花开了，
挤在绿叶丛中，
对着我吹起了小喇叭，
好像，它认识我，我认识它！

一只小鸟飞来了，
立在晒衣竿上，
对着我叽叽喳喳，
好像，它认识我，我认识它！


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Early in the Morning

By Yuanmei

Early in the morning, I wake up,
And stand in the garden.

Blue morning glories blossom,
Sitting among the green leaves,
And blowing their little trumpets at me
As if they know me, and I know them!

A little bird comes too,
Standing on the clothesline,
And happily twittering at me,
As if he knows me, and I know him!

苑眉作品

[苑眉]

先翻译些小小的诗歌吧，长的累人的呢！

[非马]

一首令人愉悦的轻快的小诗。

头一节读起来有点让人误以为你一醒来就站在园子里(你不会是站着睡觉吧？一笑)，特别是英文版。建议改为：“清晨，醒来，/在园中小立。”英文版

Early in the morning, I wake up,
And stand in the garden.

英文版的第二节略嫌罗嗦，时态(knew)也不一致。建议改为：

Sticking out from the green leaves,
Morning glories blow their little trumpets at me,
As if they know me, and I know them!

末节为：
A little bird comes too,
Standing on the clothesline,
Happily twitters at me,
As if he knows me, and I know him!

[苑眉]

[苑眉]

[苑眉]

只是，第二节改了后，结构和原诗就对不上了呢。

[海外逸士]

蓝色的牵牛花开了，
挤在绿叶丛中，
对着我吹起了小喇叭，

for these three lines, better to tanslate as follows

blue morning glories blossom
Squeezing between green leaves (but for good English, you can say: Sitting among green leaves)
And blowing their little trumpets at me

[非马]

虚拟问题？诗人该有与万物(包括石头木头)交流沟通的本事呀。哈！

[苑眉]

[苑眉]

[苑眉]

也有可能是花仙子~

[william zhou周道模]

blossom 好像是指树上的花吧？