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[英汉对照]《这是谁?》
--临屏和马失途<文革旧事入诗来>

无意翻出旧鞋样, 上边半垃人头象.
孙女问奶笑作答, 温都尔汗永健康.

《Who Is This?》
--Reply to Bygones During the Culture Revolution Written Into the Poem
Of Mr. Ma ShiTu

Unconsciously, the old scissor-cut shoe drawing were found out
On the drawing, there was a half of a man head portrait
The granddaughter asked her grandmother and the grandmother told her with smile
The former leader buried in Ondorhaan would be healthy forever

[海外逸士]

Your Chinese poem can't be defined as a poem, too bad=worded.

In English, you should write:

Reply to the Poem Of Mr. Ma ShiTu on the title of
"Bygones During the Culture Revolution"

............

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Thanks for your criticism,I will try to learn from you

please translate this poem into English,I want to learn from you.

[寸草晨露]

两语相译,要的是诗意的更广泛的流通.

一些必要的古代典故,古语有妙趣会意的仍可运用,但古体施使时代新语,新典,应是拓展古体诗的生命的必须!

我在新体诗的创作则力倡承继,因为新体诗里缺的不是创新;
我在古体诗的创作则力推创新,因为古体诗里缺的不是承继.
新体诗古体诗应相互汲取,是诗的希望所在!

[海外逸士]

in first line, delete "scissor-cut", use "design" instead of "drawing", then "was found" is enough, no need to add "out".

in the second line, also use "design" to replace "drawing", use "half of a head silhouette" to replace " half of a man head portrait".

the third line should be thus: When asked by her granddaughter, the grandma answered with a smile:"

[古韵幽馨]

莫怪我愚顿，英语不通

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