Aust Winner 澳洲长风论坛

[william zhou周道模]

O the Snowflakes

Came out of the gestation of clouds
Ran out of the immurement of Heaven
You the fairies
Flutter and fall all the way fatefully

Dancing while falling
You spread your six- petal dresses
So many peaple admire your white bodies
But understand not the sadness in dances

Singing while falling
You waken the souls of wintersweets
So many peaple revel in your bodily fragrance
But distinguish not the groans in your songs

Weeping while falling
You moisten the Spring hearts in soil
So many peaple enjoy your sacrifice
But clasp not the spirits in your bodies

Falling…fluttering…groaning…
Falling…weeping…aching…
Earth unrolls the white paper of picture
History drifts the glitter of poems

Peaple are gambolling in the cold world
Peaple are in love with the holy dreams

O Snowflakes, Why do you
whiten and empty time and space
O Snowflakes, Why do you
Cover the dirtiness and traps

　　　　　　　　　雪 儿 啊

拱破云团的孕育
逃离天庭的寒禁
仙女们啊 你们
一路飘洒 坠落命运

跳着舞坠落
牵开六花瓣的舞裙
多少人欣赏你们的玉体
却读不出舞姿中的悲情

唱着歌坠落
惊醒腊梅姐妹的芳魂
多少人陶醉你们的体香
却辨不清歌声中的呻吟

流着泪坠落
滋润泥土中的春心
多少人享受你们的献身
但搂不住骨肉中的灵魂

坠落 飞舞 呻吟
坠落 流泪 悸魂
大地铺开画卷的白纸
历史飘零诗句的晶莹

人们欢跳风寒的世界
人们迷恋圣洁的梦镜

雪儿啊，为什么
要把时间和空间洗白
雪儿啊，为什么
要遮盖污秽和陷阱

[william zhou周道模]

自改一次，请大家继续批。

[william zhou周道模]

在方家的质疑处，又自改了个别地方。

[howard2005]

O Snowflakes

Out of the womb of clouds
and the cold cage of Heaven,
you the fairies,
flutter and fall all the way fatefully.

Dancing while falling,
you spread your six-petal dresses.
So many people admire your white bodies
but understand not the griefs in your dances

Singing while falling,
you awaken the souls of wintersweets.
So many people revel in your bodily fragrance
but distinguish not the groans in your songs

Weeping while falling,
you nourish spring hearts in soil
So many people enjoy your sacrifice
but grasp not the spirits in your bodies

With your falling, fluttering and groaning…
your falling, weeping and thrilling…
Earth unrolls white picturescrolls,
History drifts the glitter of poems.

People gambol in windy and icy world!
People are enamoured with holy dreams!

O Snowflakes, why do you
whiten time and space?
O Snowflakes, why do you
cover dirts and traps?

[william zhou周道模]

感谢指点，有些可以借鉴。你的全部可以作为单独的一种翻译版本。