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[苑眉]

地图

那位卦者，有着
吉普赛人的眼神；
她盯着我的掌纹，
说——

“这是张命运地图；
你的人生之路，
有神的导引，
一切已作安排——
财富，运气，
和爱人；
一切都会来……”

唔，一切都会来！
我相信；
只是呵，怎么办呢？
我的爱人——

他很傻，看不懂神的地图；
他是又迷路了——
几个世纪已过，
却还找不到我的家门！


God's Map

Wr./Tr. By Yuanmei

Having a Gypsy eye,
The fortune-teller
Gazed at my palm
And said –

"This is a map of destiny.
The road of your life
Is laid by God;
All are planned –
Wealth, fortune,
And love;
All coming your way..."

Well，all are coming!
I believe;
But oh, what should I do?
My love –

A fool who is unable to read God's map,
He must have lost his way –
For hundreds of years,
He hasn’t yet found my doorway!

[苑眉]

想到《乱马1/2》里的 响良牙小P 了 —— 那个有趣的笨蛋大路盲哈！

[非马]

苑眉好!一首好玩的诗. 我好玩地改动了几个英文字,供你做修改的参考.

God's Map

Wr./Tr. By Yuanmei

Having a Gypsy eye
The fortune-teller
Gazed at my palm
And said –

‘This is a map of destiny.
The road of your life
Is laid by God;
All is planned –
Wealth, fortune,
And love;
All are coming your way...’

Well，all are coming!
I believe;
But oh, what should I do?
My love –

A fool who is unable to read God's map;
He must have lost his way –
For hundreds of years,
He hasn’t yet found my doorway!

[苑眉]

谢谢非马老师！很多地方改得很好。。。

只是，还有一个疑问哈：
All is planned – ———— 这句中的“is”还用不用改为“are”呢？下面的都改了啊？

期待老师的快速回复啊！

[非马]

苑眉好! 本来ALL 后面可用IS 也可用ARE, 因它可指总体(单数),也可指所有的每一个(复数).因 planned 后面用了"-", 在这里也许用ARE 较妥. 改成这样如何:

All are planned –
Wealth, fortune,
And love;
All coming your way...’

[苑眉]

[william zhou周道模]

I have read your poem and your discussions. thank you!

[苑眉]