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[苑眉]

心情

天不开心了，
晴转多云；

天生气了，
电闪雷鸣；

天哭了，
雨下不停。

但我不是天呢，
不可以像天那样，
随意发挥
自己的
心情。


Emotions

Wr./Tr. By Yuanmei

When the skies are unhappy,
It turns fine to cloudy;

When the skies become angry,
It breaks into thunder and lightning;

When the skies cry,
It rains endlessly.

But, alas, I am not the skies,
And will never be able to
Express my emotions free
As the skies do.

[william zhou周道模]

can "fine" be used as a noun here?

[苑眉]

turn 不是可以当系动词用吗？后面跟的形容词啊，这里 fine 是形容词。

[william zhou周道模]

turn...to...?

[苑眉]

也就是说，必须用名词吗？

请教了！谢谢！

[william zhou周道模]

请非马老师他们断定吧。我觉得是：

turn...名 to...名

[非马]

It turns fine to cloudy; 应该没错, 但也可写成:
It turns from clear to cloudy;

It rains continuously. --
It rains endlessly (or ceaselessly).

[苑眉]

谢谢非马老师！

我也想过用那个 ceaselessly，但就是不明白它们到底有什么区别？是不是音节比较少，读起来没有那么累赘？

请教老师们了！谢谢！

[非马]

[非马]

[苑眉]

谢谢非马老师！祝老师一切都好！

[非马]

Yet alas, I am not the sky,

在Yet 与 alas 之间需要一个 "," :

But, alas, I am not the sky,

还有, 你在末行突然由 sky 变成 skies, 谅是为了押韵 (to, do). 如果是这样, 不如全部使用skies 较统一.

[苑眉]

哦，那就再改。。。

那个 skies 确实是为了押韵。。。是学这首诗用的：

Peace

Sarah Teasdale

Peace flows into me
As the tide to the pool by the shore;
It is mine forevermore,
It ebbs not back like the sea.

I am the pool of blue
That worships the vivid sky;
My hopes were heaven-high,
They are all fulfilled in you.

I am the pool of gold
When sunset burns and dies--
You are my deepening skies,
Give me your stars to hold.

它里面也没有统一；
不过，我这里想想可能统一比较好点。。。因为指的同一片天。。。

。。。好的！现在给它们统一着装！

谢谢非马老师！

[非马]

看样子Sarah 也是为了迁就押韵.

[苑眉]

[苑眉]