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[苑眉]

共鸣

留下
几句话语，
几个文字符，
问我——

你的心事
可猜到几许？
可有他们说的那种
共鸣？

如何是好？
那扔过来的
分明
一道数学题！

排列组合算出——
你的话语
所起的作用
竟有许多种！

唔，究竟
哪一种
才是你所谓的
物理反应？


Resonance

Wr./Tr. by Yuanmei

Leaving
A few words,
Some writing characters,
You asked me –

How much did I guess
Your thoughts?
Did I give them a resonance
That was talked?

What should I do?
What you threw me
Was only
A Maths problem!

After a permutation and combination
It was worked out –
So many kinds of products
Your words produced!

Well, which one
Was the right
Physical phenomenon
That you called?

[海外逸士]

自己寫詩自己翻譯有一個不足之處。自己在寫中文時大概已經在同時考慮如何變成英
文。不利練習英文。最好拿別人的﹐如徐志摩﹑艾青等人的詩來翻譯。如果翻譯完
他們一本詩集﹐也可出中英對照本。

[苑眉]

逸士老师说的非常对啊！

情况就是那样的！
我现在是中文和英文，两边都弄成了个四不像！
头大~~

是得试试翻译别人的诗歌了！

还有闻一多、舒婷、郭小川等等他们的诗我也都很喜欢的。
先找一些看得懂的来试试！

谢谢老师！