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[苑眉]

死神国度

究竟在何处，
那一片乐土？
为何人们都纷纷
涌去？

我是毫不怀疑了，
那里生活的欢欣与富足，
因他们一个个
乐不思蜀。



The Realm of Death

Wr./Tr. by Yuanmei

Where is
The Land of Eternal Happiness?
Why do people rush there
In throngs?

I have no doubt
That they are having a life of bliss and plenty,
For none of them want to return
After leaving.

[海外逸士]

The Realm of Death

.................
.................
Why do people rush in throngs there
.......................

I have no doubt
They are having a life of bliss and plenty


should be "none are".

[苑眉]

谢谢逸士老师的修改！

还要再请教老师几个问题啊：

1、为什么用“Realm” 呢？是不是“Realm” 比“World” 的文学性强？

2、They are having a life of bliss and plenty,
—— 这句话，可不可以把后面的宾语放在前面呢？就像这样：
A life of bliss and plenty they are having,

[海外逸士]

REALM常用在詩裡。是文學性較強。

前面已有THAT﹐後面再倒置不妥。

[苑眉]

好些时间不上网了，就惦记着这里。。。
问好逸士老师、非马老师，还有新来的朋友！

谢谢逸士老师的回复，还得努力学习啊！