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非马
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加入时间: 2006/01/13 文章: 1461 来自: 芝加哥 积分: 8044
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Clone Funeral Song
with the same identical
clonal expression
a group of clones
solemnly gather
to witness the burial
of their original
died of exhaustion _________________ 欢迎访问<非马艺术世界>
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海外逸士
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加入时间: 2005/11/08 文章: 1956 来自: America 积分: 10755
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This poem is OK, only "same" and "identical" have the same meaning. One of them is enough. |
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雪泥
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加入时间: 2005/11/22 文章: 1422 来自: 西欧 积分: 8678
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海外逸士 写道: |
This poem is OK, only "same" and "identical" have the same meaning. One of them is enough. |
agree with it _________________ 雪泥作品http://vip.book.sina.com.cn/book/index_73301.html |
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