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[howard2005]

我最亲爱的

My Dearest

巫昂

by Wu Ang

我希望有人给我写封信
开头是：我最亲爱的
哪怕后边是一片空白
那也是我最亲爱的

I wish to hear from someone
A letter begins with My Dearest
Even though no words follow
It would still be My Dearest

译于2009年1月4日。

[巫朝晖]

祝情人节快乐！

[苑眉]

又是巫家人。。。

这首诗挺有趣。。。howard2005 的翻译也很棒！

[非马]

howard2005好！

1。 hear 是否用 receive 更合适？
2。试改动几个字，供参考而已：
I wish to receive from someone
A letter beginning with My Dearest
Even if not a single word follows
It's still My Dearest

[海外逸士]

hear from is better than receive from.

[非马]

如果把头一行同第二行连系在一起. 就成了I wish to hear a letter from someone, 在这种情况下,我想用I wish to receive a letter from someone 是比较妥当. 但后来仔细一想,这两行在文法上并没必要非连在一起不可,比如在第一行的末尾加个逗号之类的(当然这是一首无标点符号的诗), 让它略作停顿,这样用hear 是比receive 好.

[howard2005]

非常感谢非马老师和海外逸士老师的指教。

[海外逸士]

hear from someone is enough. It means to get a letter from him. why use "hear a letter from someone? no one will say so.

if you put two lines together: receive from someone a letter begins... then in the second line, you should say "a letter that begins..."

so we can think that the second line begins with another idea, an independent sentence.

[苑眉]

好细节的东西啊。。。我就看不出来。。。哎。。。
谢谢逸士老师！

学习了！

另：
似乎非马老师修改后的似乎比较切合原诗。。。但，howard2005 译的也不错呢！

[jakezhou]

英语要好一点

[苑眉]

这个也精华了！

诗歌有趣，大家的讨论也非常有趣！

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[李世君]

通俗易懂，很不错的一首诗

[李世君]

通俗易懂，很不错的一首诗