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[william zhou周道模]

请大家提修改意见.


Treading Snow in Early Spring
初 春 踏 雪

The eloped white clouds
私奔的白云
Sleeping on the ground, dreaming
睡在大地上做梦
The bird is crying in silence
鸟叫一声 静
The snow is thawing to coldness
雪化一滴 冷
Stepping out the imprints of the dreams
踩出了梦痕……
Heart 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
心
Fluttering to be the aquamarine in the sky
飘成天空的 幽青
The sun
太阳
Hiding behind the Spring
躲在春的背后
Only see the rapes stretching their waists in tears
只看见油菜在流泪伸腰
Only hear the sound of the wheat's lapping snows
只听见麦苗舔雪的声音

2006．2．16 故乡春雪时

[william zhou周道模]

自改一次,敬请续批.

[非马]

两个小意见:
题目"初春踏雪"译成Treading Snow in Early Spring 也许较妥当.
"伸腰" stretch

[william zhou周道模]

谢谢非马老师的斧正!