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[樱花]

*与妻子书*

作者：林野

多年来，对你爱不释手
以至于淘空了身体。你是我衰老的源泉。

以至于毁灭感
如闪电。

把你背到四十岁的高坡上
向你道歉。
我没有给你找到
返回的路。


译文（樱花）：

* to My Wife*

by Linye

After many years, you are still my lover.
The affection bring me weakness and senescence.

The sense of death like lightning strike.

I'm sorry lifting you
to a high slop for forty years.
I can't find a way to retreat
to our starting point.

[戴玨]

The affection brings me...

The sense of death is like a lightning strike.

slop or slope?

sorry 後面應接不定式或從句。

[海外逸士]

YOu can use "love" instead of "lover" here. But next line better be:

But it brings my ........

Then you can write:

And also the sense of death
Like lightning stirkes.

I must apologize
For carrying you up the slope
Of forty years old
And not finding for you
The way to return.